This is just the 1st draft of my character for Dagorhir. I am interested in what you all think and how can I imporve or imbelish it to make it better!


My name is Casamir. I was a Gypsy born and raised in England. There was a law expelling all Gypsies from being in England. During a raid on my people, from England, my entire family was sent to be executed for being Gypsies. In order to prove that I was born in England I joined and took up the red cross of the Crusaders. Some of my family made it out alive but several were killed. I was angry and mad. My Brother joined the crusaders and took up the cross as well. After many battles with my anger raging my brother renamed me Casamir or the giver of peace because my mace gave peace to so many heathens. Neither me nor my brother believed in the cross or God during this time. This did not last long. I was met by a special group of crusaders called the Knights Templar. They converted me to Christianity and quelled my sour mood. They allowed me fight fiercely and love again. My brothers, the Knights Templar, have changed me so that my anger is quelled and I have forgiven those who hurt me so long ago. I no longer feel the need to kill or be angry but beware of my mace heathens, because I don’t take lightly to threats against my brothers.